What do you think?

[NikoKing]

I guess it's a good story, and omg there's a site named after me (points at signature) NIKOGEYERDOTCOM.

 

[The Sign Painter]

Meh.

If it was supposed to be scary then it fails.

 

[yuba]

Meh.

If it was supposed to be scary then it fails.

how does it fail?

 

[Thunder]

Meh.

If it was supposed to be scary then it fails.

how does it fail?

...He just said why..

 

[yuba]

Meh.

If it was supposed to be scary then it fails.

how does it fail?

...He just said why..

well i want a little more detail thats all!

 

[The Sign Painter]

Meh.

If it was supposed to be scary then it fails.

how does it fail?

...He just said why..

well i want a little more detail thats all!

It wasn't scary at all.
It was't as scary as Barney.

 

[yuba]

Meh.

If it was supposed to be scary then it fails.

how does it fail?

...He just said why..

well i want a little more detail thats all!

It wasn't scary at all.
It was't as scary as Barney.

blah!
i blah you!
you made my friend fill bad and now she is rewriting the story....again...ugh...

 

[Nightray]

Maybe, your friend should describe the story better. It just seems like your friend stole this story from one of those Halloween story books. Which sucks. :/
She should or you should fix the typos.

 

[The Sign Painter]

Quoting limited to 5 levels deep

...He just said why..

well i want a little more detail thats all!

It wasn't scary at all.
It was't as scary as Barney.

blah!
i blah you!
you made my friend fill bad and now she is rewriting the story....again...ugh...

That post was scarier.

 

[NikoKing]

Well, I've read it again. Doesn't really scare me and I can't even understand half of it, I guess it's just messy grammar or something.

 

[Clown Town]

Im not reading it... I SEY NEY

 

[Ricano]

Im not reading it... I SEY NEY

So dun bother posting if you're not gonna contribute :L

 

[Sporge27]

Well its ok, just a bit predictable.

 

[Tree]

Alright.

 

[Yokie]

I little bit obvius.

 

[Thunder]

Quoting limited to 5 levels deep

...He just said why..

well i want a little more detail thats all!

It wasn't scary at all.
It was't as scary as Barney.

blah!
i blah you!
you made my friend fill bad and now she is rewriting the story....again...ugh...

It's criticism, you can't expect everyone to like it.

 

[coffeebean!]

Typos. Good god.
I literally swear a third grader wrote this.

My eyes they bleed.
Other than that...
Very cliche plot. Don't really like it. Needs more creativity. Bleh.

 

[yuba]

Quoting limited to 5 levels deep

well i want a little more detail thats all!

It wasn't scary at all.
It was't as scary as Barney.

blah!
i blah you!
you made my friend fill bad and now she is rewriting the story....again...ugh...

It's criticism, you can't expect everyone to like it.

well thats true...(even though she made me stay up with her late at night rewriting it)

 

[Pear]

Good, but a bit macabre for my taste.

 

[yuba]

Good, but a bit macabre for my taste.

macabre?