Someone over at Sega's official forums dissected the "Intro" on the official Sonic 4 site, pointing out all of the grammatical errors. It contains great lulz. Here it is:
EDIT: Apparently the new Intro section still has its errors. XD
Sega has since updated the Intro on the official site and fixed the errors. Still, it's hard to believe that they would even put something that unprofessional up in the first place. XDSolaris Paradox said:Who wrote this sentence? It began... as they begin... Jesus... could you have spent some of the time during the countdown actually making sure the story summary sounds vaguely appealing, maybe?It began as Sonic's animal friends begin disappearing from South Island.
And why the sudden, inexplicable change of tense?
Professional websites shouldn't have such obvious grammatic flub-ups. That's the kinda thing I'd expect out of a YouTube comment. For shame.Soon Sonic discovers that evil scientist Dr. Eggman has been kidnapping them and turning them into robots to collect the legendary treasure - The Chaos Emeralds. Sonic decides it's up to him to save them and embarks on a quest to free his animal friends. Sonic battles Eggman through many different zones. Sonic eventually pursues Eggman to Final Zone where the first in many epic battles between them begins. In the end Sonic is victorious and Eggman's Mecha fly's away badly damaged. Sonic returns to Green Hill Zone and re-unites with his friends.
If you haven't figured it out, "flies" is the correct spelling. "Fly's" makes it sound like the "away" belongs to Eggman's Mecha fly, possibly those irritating little winged turds from Aquatic Ruin Zone.
There should be a dash between those two words! *grumble grumble grammar nazi Solaris is not amused grumble*Their reunion is short lived
What are Sonic friends?however, as Eggman resurfaces and begins kidnapping Sonic friends again,
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OH, you mean SONIC'S FRIENDS.
I know this is technically a nitpick, but why is Weapon capitalized? Makes me think of Final Fantasy VII.in an effort to create more workers to finish his ultimate Weapon - The Death Egg!
The newly met? Newly met what? NEWLY MET WHAT?!Teaming up with the newly met, Miles 'Tails' Prower,
First of all, another dash between those two words...
Second of all, I'm sure there's supposed to be another word between "met" and that comma...
And lastly, what the hell? You could come up with a better way to describe a new character? The newly met, Enter Name Here? Really? Wouldn't "his new friend" at least sound a li'l bit more graceful?
"The newly met..." jeez...
"Chaos emeralds" should both be capitalized, like so: "Chaos Emeralds."Sonic embarks on a new mission through West Side Island in an effort to free his friends and ensure Eggman does not obtain the 7 Chaos emeralds to fuel the Death Egg.
But a "C" for effort, my child.
I'm not going to harp on them for this one, actually, since last I checked "Silver Sonic" was a name made up by fans to distinguish this model from the Sonic & Knuckles one.Once the West Side Island is freed, Sonic and Tails eventually board the Tornado and assault the Death Egg itself. After destroying Mecha Sonic,
Not only is this sentence supremely uninteresting, but it makes me want to quote that infamous line. In fact, I will.Eggman flees and enters his new Eggman Robot attacking Sonic!
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"LOOK AT ALL THOSE EGGMAN'S ROBOTS!"
...Ahem...
And with that out of my system, it should have been something like "...enters his new Eggman Robot, and attacks Sonic!"
The grammatical flow of that sentence makes it look like the Eggman Robot was already attacking Sonic when he entered it.
It's a load-bearing boss!After a heated battle Sonic destroys the Eggman Robot and the Death Egg begins to explode.
I assume you mean "a" mysterious island, yes?Sonic and Tails fly down and come across mysterious island called Angel Island.
I assume you mean "the" Master Emerald, yes?This island is floating by the power of the precious stone called Master Emerald,
This island are sick!but now this mysterious island are dropping down
And this grammar are broken!
That should be "is" dropping down... ggh...
"...because the Death Egg HAD FALLEN on THE island."to the ocean surface because the Death Egg had been falling on this island.
There is NO need for passive tense, and there is NO need for the word "this."
This was written by someone who's natively Japanese, wasn't it? Run this stuff through a proofreader before you put it up on a promotional website, for flap sake, will you?
Or at least a spellchecker?
Insert comma here.Sonic and Tails are attacked by a Red Echidna named Knuckles
And why is Red Echidna capitalized? Is it supposed to be a title or something? 'Cause I thought it was just a description.
C A P I T A L I Z Ethe guardian of the island.
Knuckles steals the Chaos emeralds
T H E
G O D
D A M N
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I crap you not: the lack of a space between the period and the "W" is actually a typo that's in the site's intro text. I did not transcribe this, this is straight-up copied-and-pasted.from Sonic, being tricked by Eggman that he is an enemy come to take the Master Emerald.While
That would work so much better if it read "As Sonic and Tails are entangled by Knuckles" or was just made into two sentences.Sonic and Tails are entangled by Knuckles, Eggman repairs the Death Egg and preps it for launch.
Insert "the" here.Sonic manages to jump on
"Taking" off, you mean?Death Egg just as it's flying off.
Insert "the" here.After confronting Eggman on the Death Egg, Sonic defeats Eggman once more and the Death Egg plummets back to Angel Island.
Back on the ground Dr. Eggman begins the repairing
Okay, logic problem.Death Egg again. Feeling Knuckles has served his purpose, he sends EggRobo to eliminate this potential threat.
First of all, the content of the game itself makes it a lot more sensible to just assume that Knuckles's story takes place after Sonic wins the day and returns the Master Emerald to the island. Lack of interplay between stories, the sense that Sonic's story has come and gone with the lack of the Death Egg in certain level backgrounds, the already-freed ghosts in Sandopolis, the completely different final boss and completely different situation from which the Master Emerald is saved... this feels like it was written by someone with only a cursory knowledge of the games.
Second of all, why would Eggman assume that Knuckles has served his purpose when he actually needs more time to repair the Death Egg again?
WHY WOULD KNUCKLES BE RELAXING AFTER BEING DUMPED INTO THE OCEAN DURING THE LAUNCH OF A GIANT STAR WARS RIP-OFF?! AND WHILE HE STILL KNOWS THAT SONIC IS ON THE LOOSE?! IT MAKES... NO... SENSE!EggRobo finds Knuckles relaxing in Mushroom Zone
Not to mention that he's right back to messing with Sonic almost immediately after that...
Why is Wild Echidna capitalized?! Is that a title now, too?!and drops a bomb on him but Knuckles manages to survive. Enraged, the Wild Echidna
"After an epic showdown..."sets off to defeat EggRobo. Meanwhile Sonic and Tails explore the island to find traces of the Death Egg and find out Eggman's fate. After and Epic showdown
"An," not "and." And I know the word "epic" is awesome, but it does not need to be Capitalized.
*snicker*between Sonic and Knuckles,
Yeah... that was epic. For the, like, two seconds it lasted.
Normally that expression would be "takes" the opportunity.Eggman uses the opportunity
Common mistake in, like, y'know, YouTube comments and such...to finally steal the Master Emerald and re-launches the Death Egg. With the power of the emeralds, Sonic goes after Eggman, who has taken the Master Emerald into space.
Sonic and Tails secure the Master Emerald and return it to Knuckles on Angel Island. With it's
"It's" is a short form of "it is."
"Its" is the possessive form. It should be "its."
It didn't look like a sunset, but whatever makes your inner Michael Bay happy, sai.power restored, the Angel Island lifts off into the sky as Sonic and Tails fly off into the sunset.
I have no problem with this bit, except that the inexplicable Capitilization of a certain nine-letter word makes it seem like an advert for a new Sonic Adventure game.But this humiliating defeat only serves to further Eggman's rage, and he has determined once and for all to rid himself of Sonic. Eggman revisits - and improves - the very best of his creations to defeat our spiked hero.
And so a new Adventure begins...
Can't imagine why.
EDIT: Apparently the new Intro section still has its errors. XD
Solaris Paradox said:*clamps rose between teeth*
Much better. Much, much better. Congrats, fellas, you done good.Our hedgehog's tale begins as Sonic's animal friends start disappearing from South Island. Soon after, Sonic discovers that the evil scientist Dr. Eggman has been kidnapping them and turning them into robots - all as part of a plot to collect a legendary treasure known the Chaos Emeralds. Sonic decides it's up to him to save them, and embarks on a quest to free his friends. As Sonic and Eggman clash throughout many different zones, Sonic eventually pursues Eggman to the Final Zone, where the first in many epic battles between them begins. In the end, Sonic is victorious, and Eggman's mecha flies away badly damaged. A happy ending secured, Sonic returns to Green Hill Zone and reunites with his friends.
Their reunion is short lived, however, as Eggman resurfaces and begins kidnapping Sonic friends again, now in an effort to create more workers to finish the new plans for his ultimate weapon - the Death Egg! This time, Sonic has help in the form of a two-tailed fox named Miles
