Paradox (Chapter 18)

[Bulerias]

I havent actually bothered reading.
Can anyone summerize?

Main character dies
Main character sent to heaven
Main character meets love interest
Main character finds that the love interest is more than meets the eye
Main character and love interest die again
Main character finds himself in the Second Heaven

Yeah... Start reading. This is the summary for the first... 9 chapters, I believe.

 

[Gabby]

chapter 17 is best

 

[JJH]

I believe this ends Part One? I'm glad I decided to check in. So let me try to figure this out- (Uh oh...)
1. After the first few chapters, three being held the Truth- Belial, Alejandra, and the One God.
2. Alejandra was given most of the Truth by the One God. He kept a little of it for security purposes. Alejandra gave Belial the smallest portion of the Truth (In the form of her finger).
3. Alejandra destroyed her portion, thus destroying all the Heavens.
4. There is no more Heaven, so anyone who dies before Jericho and Alejandra will end up in... Dairyland?

So Part Two will be longer and more epic? Congrats on finishing Part One, though.

And BTW, I think I'll be more active sometime soon. I'm breeding Gecko (and his girlfriends), and the eggs take a lot of work. Moisten the vermaculite (think that's what it's called), half-bury the eggs in there, keep it moist and warm, but not to moist or too warm, etc. Just wanted to clear up why I haven't been that active recently.

 

[Bulerias]

I believe this ends Part One? I'm glad I decided to check in. So let me try to figure this out- (Uh oh...)
1. After the first few chapters, three being held the Truth- Belial, Alejandra, and the One God.
2. Alejandra was given most of the Truth by the One God. He kept a little of it for security purposes. Alejandra gave Belial the smallest portion of the Truth (In the form of her finger).
3. Alejandra destroyed her portion, thus destroying all the Heavens.
4. There is no more Heaven, so anyone who dies before Jericho and Alejandra will end up in... Dairyland?

So Part Two will be longer and more epic? Congrats on finishing Part One, though.

And BTW, I think I'll be more active sometime soon. I'm breeding Gecko (and his girlfriends), and the eggs take a lot of work. Moisten the vermaculite (think that's what it's called), half-bury the eggs in there, keep it moist and warm, but not to moist or too warm, etc. Just wanted to clear up why I haven't been that active recently.

Actually, there's just one more chapter left in Part One.




But you've got everything right! Except, err, number three. Now, if somebody dies, they die eternally. Poof. No afterlife. Also, I gotta note that the finger that Belial received was a "half-truth", as I said, for there wasn't enough flesh to constitute a valid part of the Truth... So it was just as good as a lie. At this stage, the only one with a piece of the Absolute Truth is the One God, since Alejandra destroyed her piece and Belial never really had anything at all.

It gets more complicated than this, though... Stay tuned.

 

[Micah]

I just read it Bul and it's great! Keep up the good work.

 

[Bulerias]

I just read it Bul and it's great! Keep up the good work.

Thanks! I'm adding the final chapter of the first part in a minute...

 

[Bulerias]

Updated, the final chapter of the first part is in the third edit post.

 

[Grawr]

!!

Well, erm, that was uhh...quite the ending there...

How old did you say Jericho was, again?

 

[UltraByte]

!!

Well, erm, that was uhh...quite the ending there...

How old did you say Jericho was, again?

My thoughts exactly..... O_____o;

 

[Bulerias]

!!

Well, erm, that was uhh...quite the ending there...

How old did you say Jericho was, again?

You know, after SO much seriousness going on in the plot, I just felt like adding at least SOMETHING lighthearted. Yeah, perhaps I kind of did go a bit too far, but... Yeah... >_>

He's 17, but I do see what you mean.

 

[UltraByte]

Yeah, perhaps I kind of did go a bit too far, but... Yeah... >_>

*twitch*

 

[Bulerias]

Yeah, perhaps I kind of did go a bit too far, but... Yeah... >_>

*twitch*

Well, hey... At least it's pretty much open to interpretation. >_>

 

[Grawr]

Yeah, perhaps I kind of did go a bit too far, but... Yeah... >_>

*twitch*

Well, hey... At least it's pretty much open to interpretation. >_>

Well, y..yeah...

I dunno'. It just seemed a bit shocking to me...

 

[UltraByte]

Yeah, perhaps I kind of did go a bit too far, but... Yeah... >_>

*twitch*

Well, hey... At least it's pretty much open to interpretation. >_>

*still twitchy*

 

[YogurtBandit]

*watches pepole tiwtch*

Anyways, This is great!


^_^

 

[UltraByte]

*watches pepole tiwtch*

Anyways, This is great!


^_^

D:

 

[Bulerias]

Yeah, perhaps I kind of did go a bit too far, but... Yeah... >_>

*twitch*

Well, hey... At least it's pretty much open to interpretation. >_>

Well, y..yeah...

I dunno'. It just seemed a bit shocking to me...

Well, I didn't really have any other better ideas for a suitable ending, though I admit this isn't the best one ever, either. I'm like 100% sure that when my dad reads through this and helps me edit, this ending is going to be one of the first things to go.

 

[YogurtBandit]

Its okay, But I kind of liked the Ending of CHapter 17 better.

 

[Bulerias]

Its okay, But I kind of liked the Ending of CHapter 17 better.

Yeah, you know, I'm kind of thinking of ending Part One with Chapter 17 and moving Chapter 18 to Part Two and then editing the ending in that chapter to better flow with Chapter 19.

 

[YogurtBandit]

Chapter 18 could also make a good Epilouge.. I like your idea better tho.