When Two Worlds Collide.

[«Jack»]

no, im just saying that it's... kinda confusing to keep it up with... at this rate, you might never finish... if the plot is going to change drastically all the time, well... i want to play this, but now im getting bored...

Ah I understand, Also i the game with my plot in less than a hour so don't worry.

Also i am only choosen 50 people to beta my game.

I'm one of them, right?
I applied on like page 5.

 

[Josh]

no, im just saying that it's... kinda confusing to keep it up with... at this rate, you might never finish... if the plot is going to change drastically all the time, well... i want to play this, but now im getting bored...

Ah I understand, Also i the game with my plot in less than a hour so don't worry.

Also i am only choosen 50 people to beta my game.

I'm one of them, right?
I applied on like page 5.

Yup, all my staff

 

[Bacon Boy]

no, im just saying that it's... kinda confusing to keep it up with... at this rate, you might never finish... if the plot is going to change drastically all the time, well... i want to play this, but now im getting bored...

Ah I understand, Also i the game with my plot in less than a hour so don't worry.

Also i am only choosen 50 people to beta my game.

I'm one of them, right?
I applied on like page 5.

Yup, all my staff

Yay! So I'm in it too! Also, did Micah send you our idea?

 

[[Nook]]

So, where's the beta then?

 

[Josh]

no, im just saying that it's... kinda confusing to keep it up with... at this rate, you might never finish... if the plot is going to change drastically all the time, well... i want to play this, but now im getting bored...

Ah I understand, Also i the game with my plot in less than a hour so don't worry.

Also i am only choosen 50 people to beta my game.

I'm one of them, right?
I applied on like page 5.

Yup, all my staff

Yay! So I'm in it too! Also, did Micah send you our idea?

Yeah, im doing some mapping and eventing now.

My brother is also going to help me see if i've made any grammar mistakes.

EDIT:

@Nook: Hopefully this Tuesday/Wednesday

 

[Bacon Boy]

Quoting limited to 5 levels deep

I'm one of them, right?
I applied on like page 5.

Yup, all my staff

Yay! So I'm in it too! Also, did Micah send you our idea?

Yeah, im doing some mapping and eventing now.

My brother is also going to help me see if i've made any grammar mistakes.

EDIT:

@Nook: Hopefully this Tuesday/Wednesday

Also, look at that list I sent you of the avoidable cliches and what you can do instead.

 

[Hiro]

Plothole filled in:

<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">Lew who never excperienced evil before becomes terrified about what he learns while progressing through the quest. The lady starts becoming more vicious and mad and Lew starts suspecting something is wrong with her.

Lew goes through a dungeon and meets a boy who had been trapped there for years, (living on souls, which Lew finds out later) and he shows kindness which is the only thing Lew recognises from the "perfect world".

Lew, the lady and the boy go through a town in which they find out more information about this bad things that had start to happen.

ALTERNATE ENDING: It later turns out that the boy's name is Lewis and is a evil twin of Lew. He betrays them and hand them over to "the dark side"</div>

This is all i can come up with for now.

EDIT: loltypo

 

[Josh]

Quoting limited to 5 levels deep

Yup, all my staff

Yay! So I'm in it too! Also, did Micah send you our idea?

Yeah, im doing some mapping and eventing now.

My brother is also going to help me see if i've made any grammar mistakes.

EDIT:

@Nook: Hopefully this Tuesday/Wednesday

Also, look at that list I sent you of the avoidable cliches and what you can do instead.

Yeah i read them, and i double check them everytime im doing my project.

 

[Josh]

Plothole filled in:

<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">Lew who never excperienced evil before becomes terrified about what he learns while progressing through the quest. The lady starts becoming more vicious and mad and Lew starts suspecting something is wrong with her.

Lew goes through a dungeon and meets a boy who had been trapped their for years, (living on souls, which Lew finds out later) and he shows kindness which is the only thing Lew recognises from the "perfect world".

Lew, the lady and the boy go through a town in which they find out more information about this bad things that had start to happen.

ALTERNATE ENDING: It later turns out that the boy's name is Lewis and is a evil twin of Lew. He betrays them and hand them over to "the dark side"

This is all i can come up with for now.</div>

Some of the ideas are cool.

I like:

"Lew goes through a dungeon and meets a boy who had been trapped their for years, (living on souls, which Lew finds out later) and he shows kindness which is the only thing Lew recognises from the "perfect world."

I will use this somewhere in between my story, but i might edit abit of it.

 

[Hiro]

Plothole filled in:

<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">Lew who never excperienced evil before becomes terrified about what he learns while progressing through the quest. The lady starts becoming more vicious and mad and Lew starts suspecting something is wrong with her.

Lew goes through a dungeon and meets a boy who had been trapped their for years, (living on souls, which Lew finds out later) and he shows kindness which is the only thing Lew recognises from the "perfect world".

Lew, the lady and the boy go through a town in which they find out more information about this bad things that had start to happen.

ALTERNATE ENDING: It later turns out that the boy's name is Lewis and is a evil twin of Lew. He betrays them and hand them over to "the dark side"

This is all i can come up with for now.</div>

Some of the ideas are cool.

I like:

"Lew goes through a dungeon and meets a boy who had been trapped their for years, (living on souls, which Lew finds out later) and he shows kindness which is the only thing Lew recognises from the "perfect world."

I will use this somewhere in between my story, but i might edit abit of it.

Sure, im just happy somebody likes my idea ^o^

 

[Bacon Boy]

Quoting limited to 5 levels deep

Yay! So I'm in it too! Also, did Micah send you our idea?

Yeah, im doing some mapping and eventing now.

My brother is also going to help me see if i've made any grammar mistakes.

EDIT:

@Nook: Hopefully this Tuesday/Wednesday

Also, look at that list I sent you of the avoidable cliches and what you can do instead.

Yeah i read them, and i double check them everytime im doing my project.

Also, I think the lady should turn out to be one of the main bad guys in the end. And since Lew didn't know "bad" then he didn't know what she was doing was wrong. It should kind of be a good/bad choice game. Your actions develop the outcome kind of thing.

Also, make the alternate realm extremely dark, like Dark Aether from Echoes. The sky is always purplish blackish redish.

 

[Josh]

Quoting limited to 5 levels deep

Yeah, im doing some mapping and eventing now.

My brother is also going to help me see if i've made any grammar mistakes.

EDIT:

@Nook: Hopefully this Tuesday/Wednesday

Also, look at that list I sent you of the avoidable cliches and what you can do instead.

Yeah i read them, and i double check them everytime im doing my project.

Also, I think the lady should turn out to be one of the main bad guys in the end. And since Lew didn't know "bad" then he didn't know what she was doing was wrong. It should kind of be a good/bad choice game. Your actions develop the outcome kind of thing.

Also, make the alternate realm extremely dark, like Dark Aether from Echoes. The sky is always purplish blackish redish.

Yeah, is that when the "bad" world starts to combine?

 

[Bacon Boy]

Quoting limited to 5 levels deep

Also, look at that list I sent you of the avoidable cliches and what you can do instead.

Yeah i read them, and i double check them everytime im doing my project.

Also, I think the lady should turn out to be one of the main bad guys in the end. And since Lew didn't know "bad" then he didn't know what she was doing was wrong. It should kind of be a good/bad choice game. Your actions develop the outcome kind of thing.

Also, make the alternate realm extremely dark, like Dark Aether from Echoes. The sky is always purplish blackish redish.

Yeah, is that when the "bad" world starts to combine?

Yea, but the bad world already has to look dark. If he traverses to it, that is. But just don't make it like a MM thing where you are timed. But still, I think the choice thing is a good idea.

 

[Josh]

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Yeah i read them, and i double check them everytime im doing my project.

Also, I think the lady should turn out to be one of the main bad guys in the end. And since Lew didn't know "bad" then he didn't know what she was doing was wrong. It should kind of be a good/bad choice game. Your actions develop the outcome kind of thing.

Also, make the alternate realm extremely dark, like Dark Aether from Echoes. The sky is always purplish blackish redish.

Yeah, is that when the "bad" world starts to combine?

Yea, but the bad world already has to look dark. If he traverses to it, that is. But just don't make it like a MM thing where you are timed. But still, I think the choice thing is a good idea.

Alright. Also in my short game demo i will include atleast 1 boss to see how my battle system is like.

 

[Bacon Boy]

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Also, I think the lady should turn out to be one of the main bad guys in the end. And since Lew didn't know "bad" then he didn't know what she was doing was wrong. It should kind of be a good/bad choice game. Your actions develop the outcome kind of thing.

Also, make the alternate realm extremely dark, like Dark Aether from Echoes. The sky is always purplish blackish redish.

Yeah, is that when the "bad" world starts to combine?

Yea, but the bad world already has to look dark. If he traverses to it, that is. But just don't make it like a MM thing where you are timed. But still, I think the choice thing is a good idea.

Alright. Also in my short game demo i will include atleast 1 boss to see how my battle system is like.

Okay.

 

[Hiro]

Moar:

<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">While at the town, Lew wants to go on his own for awhile. When he sees a dark spot inside a bush he decides to walk towards it, causing dark monsters to come out. The monsters fight Lew and if he wins, the story will progress. Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole.

Lew (after waking up) finds out he is in the dark world. He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world". You later find out that the lady isn't evil, she does it for "your own good".</div>

Loltypo

 

[Josh]

Moar:

<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">While at the town, Lew wants to go on his own for awhile. When he sees a dark spot inside a bush he decides to walk towards it, causing dark monsters to come out. The monsters fight Lew and if he wins, the story will progress. Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole.

Lew (after waking up) finds out he is in the dark world. He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world". You later find out that the lady isn't evil, she does it for "your own good".</div>

Loltypo

Some cool ideas.

Here are some thing which i liked:

"Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole."

"He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world" "

 

[Hiro]

Moar:

<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">While at the town, Lew wants to go on his own for awhile. When he sees a dark spot inside a bush he decides to walk towards it, causing dark monsters to come out. The monsters fight Lew and if he wins, the story will progress. Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole.

Lew (after waking up) finds out he is in the dark world. He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world". You later find out that the lady isn't evil, she does it for "your own good".</div>

Loltypo

Some cool ideas.

Here are some thing which i liked:

"Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole."

"He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world" "

You only like the evil parts D:

/jk

 

[Josh]

Moar:

<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">While at the town, Lew wants to go on his own for awhile. When he sees a dark spot inside a bush he decides to walk towards it, causing dark monsters to come out. The monsters fight Lew and if he wins, the story will progress. Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole.

Lew (after waking up) finds out he is in the dark world. He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world". You later find out that the lady isn't evil, she does it for "your own good".</div>

Loltypo

Some cool ideas.

Here are some thing which i liked:

"Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole."

"He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world" "

You only like the evil parts D:

/jk

Yeah.

 

[Hiro]

Moar:

<div class='spoiler_toggle'>Spoiler: click to toggle</div><div class="spoiler" style="display:none;">While at the town, Lew wants to go on his own for awhile. When he sees a dark spot inside a bush he decides to walk towards it, causing dark monsters to come out. The monsters fight Lew and if he wins, the story will progress. Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole.

Lew (after waking up) finds out he is in the dark world. He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world". You later find out that the lady isn't evil, she does it for "your own good".</div>

Loltypo

Some cool ideas.

Here are some thing which i liked:

"Lew turns around, just to face the lady pushing him down the dark hole."

"He sees what the world would be if the evil side combined with the "perfect world" "

You only like the evil parts D:

/jk

Yeah.

So i was thinking about a name for the lady and the boy.

Lady: It depends, if shes old then: Astrid

Boy: Well, Lewis, or Lew also since he is Lews twin xD