Trainer Tom

[Trent the Paladin]

Welcome to Tom's story.I had begun writing it at Pokemon Trainers and brought it here to see what you guys think. There's not much action yet but soon there will be. Here's the info of the characters so far:

Tom Potter

: A young eager new Pokemon Trainer and Co-ordinator. He's often reckless and brave when danger comes his way but when nothing is happing he's just another smart and kind person.

Lily Potter

: Tom's mother, who lives with Tom and Emily in Pallet town. She married Rick Potter, and she was always the smart one.

Emily Potter

: Tom's little sister who can't wait to get her first Pokemon. Like Tom, she's also smart and a little reckless. She's 8 years old.

Rick Potter: Tom and Emily's deceased father, killed in a Team Rocket legendary Pokemon theft. He had saved Moltres before he died from a gunshot. He was a Gym Leader and was replaced by Giovanni.

Ash Ketchum

: Many of you are already aware of Ash Ketchum from the popular TV series, but within the story he'll serve as a friend and a rival to Tom.

Gary Oak

: Also from the popular TV series, he serves a rival and part time friend to Tom also.

Jenny Welk

: Jenny also shares Tom's birth date and most of his personalties. They quickly become great friend who travel together.

Chapters:
Chapter 1:A New Start
Chapter 2oke-Problems!
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Working on:
Chapter 3 and 4
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<big><big><big>Chapter 1; A New Start</big></big></big><big><big>:

*Beep, beep. Beep, beep.* "Ohhhhhhhhh," Tom moaned.... It was his usual 5:30 wake up call. Tom moved his hand around in the darkness, fingering for the alarm. He had forgotten to disable it, for today was his birthday and the day he leaves Pallet Town for awhile.

As he hit the button on his alarm his light turned on. It was his mother, Lily.

"I thought you'd forget to turn that off. I was up all night packing for you. And you don't need to worry about the Miltanks, this morning, since it is your birthday," she said.

"Thanks mom, but are you sure you and Emily can handle it," Tom asked.

"Of course, why wouldn't we? We've done it enough times to know it by heart. Is Ash or Gary going with you on your journey?"

"Only Ash is. For a day anyways. After that we go our separate ways."

"Ok then. I packed you clean clothes and swim gear, a tent , sleeping bag, pots and pans, a foldable multipurpose bicycle, food, a water canteen, and contest supplies. You know how to use all, right?"

"Of course I do."

Emily cut in saying," Tom can I come with you?"

"Your only 8 years old, and not quite old enough yet," Tom and Lily said in unison.

"Humph, can I at least get one from you Tom," she asked.

"Sure, the second Pokemon I catch I'll send to you," he said nicely.

Tom followed his mother downstairs and saw his backpack loaded and and his bike outside. The three sat down to eat and began talking a little
before Tom left. After they were done Tom checked his watch.

"It's 7 am. The early bird catches the worm, I suppose. I'd better get going."

Emily quickly spoke up," What Pokemon are you going to get?"

"Uhh, I hadn't thought about that. Maybe Bulbasaur or Squirtle, oh I'll get Charmander!"

His watch beeped. "7:15," he thought.

"I need to go now, bye!" And with that he zipped out the door, onto his bike and sped off for Professor Oak's lab.

<big><big><big><big><big>Chapter 2; Poke-Problems!</big></big></big></big></big><big><big>:

As Tom continues his speedy decent towards Professor Oak's lab trying to make up for lost time.But Tom took a sharp turn around the corner, causing him to lose control some and come crashing into a girl. Tom passed out, while the girl's parents came running out.

"Are you ok," a voice said.

Tom opened his eyes to see he was inside someone's house.

"I think I'm ok. I at least know I'm not dead....," he began," Wait I still need to get
my starter Pokemon!"

"You should wait first, my dad is fixing your bike," the kind gentle voice said.

"Tom open his eyes all the way and saw it was a girl most likely his age.

"My name is Jenny. You nearly ran me over with you bike."

"Oh I'm sorry. The name's Tom."

"That's ok. Do you want some lunch? I'm sure it will help pass the time."

As Jenny's mother made lunch Tom and Jenny continued talking and then some PB&J
sandwiches and Fritios were served. Jenny's father then came announcingthat his bike was done.

"Sustained a bit of damage but it's ok now. I take it you're on your way to get your first Pokemon, yes?"

"Yes I am," Tom spoke.

Tom looked at his watch to see it was 12:30pm.

"Oh no I'm late! Sorry to rush out on you all but I need to get a Pokemon before they are out."

"Great, you and Jenny can go together," pronounced her mother," She was also going."

Tom nodded and walked out side to see his bike and Jenny's.

"Off we go," she yelled.

<big><big><big>What do you think?</big></big></big><big></big></big></big></big>

 

[JJH]

Good start, I've been waiting to see a PKMN story. I'm horrible at writing though, so.. Yeah.

And I noticed some of your names are quite original.

 

[UltraByte]

It's better than some fanfics I've read here...You have somewhat good grammar, with a few mistakes here and there. Paragraph structure is okay. Names.... are totally unoriginal (Lily Potter? <_<). I'm not a fan of bringing in actual characters of the show, it just shows originality.

Also, host the images off of photobucket or something. Hotlinking= evil

 

[Trent the Paladin]

It's better than some fanfics I've read here...You have somewhat good grammar, with a few mistakes here and there. Paragraph structure is okay. Names.... are totally unoriginal (Lily Potter? <_<). I'm not a fan of bringing in actual characters of the show, it just shows originality.

Also, host the images off of photobucket or something. Hot]
I wasn't trying to match, I realized that after Chapter 1. (Dang Harry Potter book)

 

[Tyler]

Skip lines in between paragraphs, and make it less talking and Ub is right about characters.

Not half bad.

 

[Trent the Paladin]

It's better than some fanfics I've read here...You have somewhat good grammar, with a few mistakes here and there. Paragraph structure is okay. Names.... are totally unoriginal (Lily Potter? <_<). I'm not a fan of bringing in actual characters of the show, it just shows originality.

Also, host the images off of photobucket or something. Hot]
I plan on cutting them off after the Indigo Plateau. Anyways here:


<big><big><big>Chapter 3; Dude, where's my Pikachu?</big>:

As Tom and Jenny rode towards Professor Oak's lab they quickly braked due to an oncoming car. The car stop next to them and rolled down the window...Gary. "Great," Tom thought. "Well, well, well you're really behind today Potter. And to think you said you'd get your Pokemon before me and Ash? Hah, Ashie boy got to the lab a few minutes ago and now you're the one who's behind! Ain't that right girls," he asked. "Yeah, yeah," they replied happily. "

"Why don't you put you mouth where the butt is and tell them robots to shut up," Tom spoke tauntingly.

"I'd watch that mouth of yours," he spoke," Anyways I have Pokemon to catch and places to be! Later chumps!" And with that Gary and Co. sped off.

"Who was that jerk," Jenny asked.

"His name is Gary and is a rival of mine. He's been like that for I long as I can remember. He's the grandson of the Professor and thinks he better than other because of that."

" Sounds like a case of a big ego."

"Yep that's basically it. Anyways we'd better get going I don't want to wait and much longer."

As they moved along they saw the lab in it's full view and saw Ash like with a Pikachu.

"Gary was right I did come in last, crud.....Hmmm hey Jenny what Pokemon are you going to get?"

"Who me? I dunno, I was thinking about getting a Squirtle. Yeah, I think that's what I'll get me," she paused and had a smirk on her face. She got off her bike and ran to the lab.

"Hey wait up! That not fair you got a head stop!" Tom jumped off, and in hot pursuit and got all the up the steps before her.

"How'd you do that?"

"When you have to stop rampaging Miltanks, you got to be quick about it."

"Well hello there," the Professor spoke," I suppose you're that late arrivals Tom and Jenny, no?"

"You would be correct," Tom said for them both of them

"Well unfortunately, Tom your Pikachu ran off with the only Squirtle left."

At that moment their hope sank and then began to rise when Jenny began to speak.

"Professor, may we search for the Pokemon? I mean we came to get them and it would be disappointing not to get them."

"I don' see why not...But you'll have to let me come with you, you see some of the Pokemon back there only like me. So if I'm with you they're back off and won't attack you."

" Alright then, let's go," Tom spoke up impatiently.

<big><big><big>Well do you like it?</big>

 

[Melee201]

This is a good story so far. Keep it up.

 

[Trent the Paladin]

<big><big><big>Chapter 4; Oh A Huntin' We Will Go!:</big></big></big><big><big>

As Tom, Jenny, and Prof Oak continued their decent through the lab's grounds, they stumbled upon the water type area, to encounter thousands of different water type Pokemon.

"Wow," Jenny began," It's amazing here. All the water Pokemon look so happy."

"Why, yes they are," the Professor answered," they all live in peace and harmony, but the peace doesn't last long often."

"What do you mean Professor," Tom asked.

"Well, as you know Pokemon are similar to humans in many ways. We both have emotions, the carving of some foods, and that we need water and each other to live. This being the water type area, you can see over there, a trainer's Treecko. The grass Pokemon's domain does not have a lake of any sort of river or water in it, forcing them to go to the water Pokemon area."

" I get it now," Tom started," you're saying that because the grass type Pokemon have no where to go to get water, the closest body of water near them is this lake here."

"Correct. Go on."

" And that grass Pokemon have an advantage aganist water Pokemon, that they are perceived to be a threat to the water PKMN, and that battles are fought just for survival?"

"Yes, Tom you are correct. And the rock and ground type Pokemon are unwilling to help create a lake for the grass PKMN, forcing me to constantly referee between the two."

Jenny finally spoke up," Well does that mean my Squirtle might be here?"

"Yes, it's possible."

Just then, a Pikachu and Squirtle stumbled through the bush with some trainer's Onix. The Onix, obviously anger by the two started to use dig, however the two Pokemon dodged causing the Onix to continue it's chase after the two towards the grassy region of the lab grounds.

" That's my Pikachu and Jenny's Squirtle, and they may be in trouble," Tom said, shocked at the sudden commotion that took place just a few seconds ago. He took off in a run leaving the still shocked Jenny and Professor to chase after.

" Tom, wait," Jenny shouted after him," you don't know where that Onix may pop-up!"

"Yes, Tom, listen to your friend! What happens up ahead, could be trouble!"

Tom, completely phased still continued his run after the two PKMN.
I should be able to catch them just in time, hopefully before Onix does., Tom thought,I wonder what those two did to make the Onix angry. As Tom neared the grass land area, he fell over a Oddish on the edge of a cliff.

"Holy crud, a cliff," Tom yelled while free falling down the cliff, only to be saved by the angry Onix, by accident. The Onix, completely unphased continued and jumped to the other side of the cliff's wall, still in hot pursuit for the two starter Pokemon. When it finally caught up to them, if was as if they were waiting for it, it started following the the PKMN duo around in circles. The Onix, tired out, stopped and went away. Tom regained his stance and saw what the Onix had done..

"Wow, a bowl carved into the earth! Wait....I know what they were doing! They made a lake for the grass PKMN!"

As he spoke the Professor caught with Jenny in a beat up jeep, and Squirtle began filling in the lake using water gun.

"Tom, you're ok," both of them said.

"I see what the Pokemon, did," the Professor began," they made a lake for grass-type PKMN! "

"Yes, and they made me a feel like an astronaut, because of that," Tom said, annoyed.

The two Pokemon walked up to him and the Pikachu jumped up onto his shoulder.

"Hey Professor, this wouldn't happen to be the Pichu that I helped grow during my free time here?"

"Why yes, Tom, it is. I thought it would only be fitting to give you a PKMN that bonded with you. It was only yesterday that it evolved."

"Wow, Tom, I'm jealous," Jenny began," it looks like I've got a long way to go before I can befriend my PKMN."

"Yes, well, let's go back to the lab, so you two can get going."


After arriving at the lab....

"Oh, Tom I nearly forgot to tell you something," Professor Oak spoke," when that Pichu evolved, not only did it evolve but it learned volt tackle and thunderpunch."

"What, really? But those moves are incredibly powerful," Jenny said surprised.

"Yes, I know...I found out from the trainer that gave me the egg, told me that his PKMN that he bred to get the Pichu, knew those attacks. That being said, I'm sure Tom will use those moves wisely."

" I most likely won't use Volt tackle, for it stuns not only the other PKMN but the attacker itself."

"I'm glad to hear that," Professor Oak spoke," and with that said, here's your Pokedex and five Pokeballs."

"Thank you, Professor, I'm sure Tom and I have to get going to make it to the outskirts of Pallet Town before evening."

" Yes, thank you Professor, goodbye for now!"

"Goodbye, Tom and Jenny! Good luck!"

 

[domi_roks]

wow that one of the best ones so-far i think


carry on with it its really good! i would like to write something but i have no ideas