So, I've Decided To Write... Is it good?

[BlueSkittleWolf]

So, I tried to write, but I don't know if I'm good enough anymore... I'm a very negative person, sorry!
Anyway, any opinions on it would be nice, thank you! ^-^ Improvements, too? I want to be the best I can be!
Since, this is also my website and I design it how I want- PREPARE FOR MUSIC!


Story Site Thing <--- Click that to see what I've bothered to write..

 

[HelloAnna]

Too much dialogue IMO, but I like your website/stories. Keep it up! I can't write for my life so I have no right to give advice. You're on the right track ​

 

[BlueSkittleWolf]

Too much dialogue IMO, but I like your website/stories. Keep it up! I can't write for my life so I have no right to give advice. You're on the right track ​

Yeah, I've definitely noticed a lot of dialogue, but I do like to write dialogue because me characters are meant to be -In a way- Chatty. Not all of them are, but, eh.
Thanks for the advice though, I'll definately keep that in mind!