Paradox (Chapter 18)

[Bulerias]

Ahhh! This is getting creepy, and slightly gruesome. >.<

How many chapters are there?

Yep, it IS getting creepy. But we're getting to the point where I throw away every cliche established already. You see, I had everything planned out. Just from reading the earlier chapters you wouldn't know this is something original.

There are 17 chapters in the first part. Second one should have just as many.

 

[Grawr]

Ahhh! This is getting creepy, and slightly gruesome. >.<

How many chapters are there?

Yep, it IS getting creepy. But we're getting to the point where I throw away every cliche established already. You see, I had everything planned out. Just from reading the earlier chapters you wouldn't know this is something original.

There are 17 chapters in the first part. Second one should have just as many.

Does it, uhh...Does it get any creepier/more gruesome?

 

[Bulerias]

Ahhh! This is getting creepy, and slightly gruesome. >.<

How many chapters are there?

Yep, it IS getting creepy. But we're getting to the point where I throw away every cliche established already. You see, I had everything planned out. Just from reading the earlier chapters you wouldn't know this is something original.

There are 17 chapters in the first part. Second one should have just as many.

Does it, uhh...Does it get any creepier/more gruesome?

Well, not really any more creepy, though there is one more gruesome scene that's in the next chapter... And there aren't any more gruesome scenes after that.

 

[Grawr]

Ahhh! This is getting creepy, and slightly gruesome. >.<

How many chapters are there?

Yep, it IS getting creepy. But we're getting to the point where I throw away every cliche established already. You see, I had everything planned out. Just from reading the earlier chapters you wouldn't know this is something original.

There are 17 chapters in the first part. Second one should have just as many.

Does it, uhh...Does it get any creepier/more gruesome?

Well, not really any more creepy, though there is one more gruesome scene that's in the next chapter... And there aren't any more gruesome scenes after that.

Alright...

*braces self for gruesomness*

 

[Bulerias]

Ahhh! This is getting creepy, and slightly gruesome. >.<

How many chapters are there?

Yep, it IS getting creepy. But we're getting to the point where I throw away every cliche established already. You see, I had everything planned out. Just from reading the earlier chapters you wouldn't know this is something original.

There are 17 chapters in the first part. Second one should have just as many.

Does it, uhh...Does it get any creepier/more gruesome?

Well, not really any more creepy, though there is one more gruesome scene that's in the next chapter... And there aren't any more gruesome scenes after that.

Alright...

*braces self for gruesomness*

Haha... Good idea.


But trust me, everything that's happening has a crucial meaning to the main plot. Even the cliched beginning... It's central to the main meaning - paradox! It all begins like any other story, with the usual cliches, and then takes a turn for the unexpected.

 

[Propaganda Man]

I've read the first 3 chapters and its pretty good. I don't like Athos, not just for his views but because he seems to be using Ebb (I think thats his name) Right before Ebb could really rebel he sent a woman to take his mind off everything. He could only think of her physical perfection. Same with the water, sounds like magic to me.

The thing I disagree with, Athos's views wise, is that he wants the truth for everyone. People are stupid, knowledge can only be as good as people use it.

 

[Propaganda Man]

The problems I have with it is that I don't really know anything at all about the characters.

But as for chapter 4...I think my previous thoughts of Athos were correct. There is some unseen force (perhaps magic) working here. Perhaps later in the story, instead of falling close (if not to) victim to it, he will overcome it and become a better human by conquering his greed and lust. Dare I say becoming more of a "perfect" human.

 

[Grawr]

I dunno'..

Athos = still my favorite character.

 

[Propaganda Man]

Chapter 5 was brilliant.

 

[Propaganda Man]

Another thing I am predicting is that the girl knows/has been watching Jerihco(SP?) Lust is basically what you would feel first. Before love that is. He may have been with her for more than a year for all we know. But from the events that have taken place the most he knows about her is what she looks like and her name. This isn't Romeo and Juliet unfortuantly and Jerihco is in over his head.

Also, did Athos ever say he was in heaven or that he just died? Because that should explain a lot for now and the future.

 

[Propaganda Man]

And, Why do the gods need prophecies? They are gods.

Athos, who claims to be a "God" says that he knows nothing about human perfection but it exsists. Religous groups that say that their God/s is/are perfect normally don't give it/them a human description. However, here even the "thunderbolts" have human features.

Gods can make mistakes, we know that because they differe in views. Perfection is a state of mind really. For the Gods of the dark it would be a much more "evil" world. However, for the light it would be much more free.

As I was writing this I also thought about greed and what it has to do with the story. 4 times one can say greed has been put into the story. Once of the greed of knowledge when he thought not of his parents worries if he dies. Again with lust. Also with the Gods of the dark wanting to keep the knowledge for themselves (or away from others) and again with the greed of blood and more.

 

[Bulerias]

WOW, Propaganda Man! You've got SO much right it's almost scary. Nice job! Although I have to clear something up. Alejandra MAY HAVE seen Jericho before, but he has never been aware of her watching him, and he has not met her before. But greed is an EXTREMELY central plot point... you've got that right! Also, Athos is indeed NOT almighty, and that shall be explained in Chapters 6 and 7.

Also, note that Athos has only said that he Jericho has died and was in heaven. This, however, means practically nothing... After all... something was hinted on in Chapter 4...

"...Though heaven was not as flashy as Jericho had thought it might be..."

"...The road was mostly monotonous, which surprised Jericho. Heaven was supposedly extremely pretty and appealing to all the senses, but thus far, the journey was somewhat dull..."

And yet, this is DEFINITELY heaven. See what's going on here?

 

[DarthGohan1]

So, when does Voldemort come into play?

 

[Propaganda Man]

Thanks Bul.


^_^

Most of it comes from reading the book Wizards First Rule. (Not your story, my ability to understand them) The theme of it is:

"People are stupid; given proper motivation, almost anyone will believe almost anything. Because people are stupid, they will believe a lie because they want to believe it's true, or because they are afraid it might be true. People's heads are full of knowledge, facts, and beliefs, and most of it is false, yet they think it all true. People are stupid; they can only rarely tell the difference between a lie and the truth, and yet they are confident they can, and so all are easier to fool.

 

[Grawr]

WOW, Propaganda Man! You've got SO much right it's almost scary. Nice job! Although I have to clear something up. Alejandra MAY HAVE seen Jericho before, but he has never been aware of her watching him, and he has not met her before. But greed is an EXTREMELY central plot point... you've got that right! Also, Athos is indeed NOT almighty, and that shall be explained in Chapters 6 and 7.

Also, note that Athos has only said that he Jericho has died and was in heaven. This, however, means practically nothing... After all... something was hinted on in Chapter 4...

"...Though heaven was not as flashy as Jericho had thought it might be..."

"...The road was mostly monotonous, which surprised Jericho. Heaven was supposedly extremely pretty and appealing to all the senses, but thus far, the journey was somewhat dull..."

And yet, this is DEFINITELY heaven. See what's going on here?

You continue to say "greed", you mean "lust"?

 

[Propaganda Man]

WOW, Propaganda Man! You've got SO much right it's almost scary. Nice job! Although I have to clear something up. Alejandra MAY HAVE seen Jericho before, but he has never been aware of her watching him, and he has not met her before. But greed is an EXTREMELY central plot point... you've got that right! Also, Athos is indeed NOT almighty, and that shall be explained in Chapters 6 and 7.

Also, note that Athos has only said that he Jericho has died and was in heaven. This, however, means practically nothing... After all... something was hinted on in Chapter 4...

"...Though heaven was not as flashy as Jericho had thought it might be..."

"...The road was mostly monotonous, which surprised Jericho. Heaven was supposedly extremely pretty and appealing to all the senses, but thus far, the journey was somewhat dull..."

And yet, this is DEFINITELY heaven. See what's going on here?

You continue to say "greed", you mean "lust"?

Lust is one form of greed.

 

[JJH]

Wow last time I checked you were at chapter 2...

 

[Grawr]

Wow last time I checked you were at chapter 2...

The fact that he put up chapter five is my fault.

 

[Bulerias]

WOW, Propaganda Man! You've got SO much right it's almost scary. Nice job! Although I have to clear something up. Alejandra MAY HAVE seen Jericho before, but he has never been aware of her watching him, and he has not met her before. But greed is an EXTREMELY central plot point... you've got that right! Also, Athos is indeed NOT almighty, and that shall be explained in Chapters 6 and 7.

Also, note that Athos has only said that he Jericho has died and was in heaven. This, however, means practically nothing... After all... something was hinted on in Chapter 4...

"...Though heaven was not as flashy as Jericho had thought it might be..."

"...The road was mostly monotonous, which surprised Jericho. Heaven was supposedly extremely pretty and appealing to all the senses, but thus far, the journey was somewhat dull..."

And yet, this is DEFINITELY heaven. See what's going on here?

You continue to say "greed", you mean "lust"?

Nope. It's not lust.

 

[JJH]

Wow last time I checked you were at chapter 2...

The fact that he put up chapter five is my fault.

Well thank you Gengar. You get a kooky.