help me improve my first ever chibi pl0x

[toastia]

I'm currently trying my best to be better at traditional art first(tbf i'd rather just trace it on a computer than go buy a tablet, even if it is more time-consuming) and plz rate my attempt at a chibi.

i'll update the picture l8ter with it traced and fully digital

critisims appreciated but don't be too harsh and plz explain/link some source pictures of your point

 

[Keitara]

Ahh I'll support new artists with all my might! :'>
You want it to be rated in numbers? Well. The first attempt is always not the best, so maybe you could try to practice a bit before you wanna get some ratings?
If some tips are allowed, you can read further:
-shape of the head is alright
-eyes need to be more balanced, not one bigger and one smaller, try to draw thin straight lines into the head for orientation. Try also to make them rounder. Make the upper lines of the eye thicker and, maybe, add small lashes for a girly style.
-It looks a bit strange that the right ear is visible but not the left one, the problem is probably caused in context with angle and hair, so for now better try to draw both or leave them out (->long hair)
-Hair..well. I don't know how to give tips, maybe it'll be best if you take a reference and try to "copy" it, so that you get a feeling for it. Uhmm... how to say? Try to draw them more natural, not so stiff and curved.
-Maybe you can place the nose a bit lower.
- try to make the legs more like a slight "triangle" not like 2 straight lines.
- chibi feet are often drawn like "hooves" (sorry, I'm bad at finding the right words DX), basically, they are melted with the leg.
- for the arms and upper torso, I'm sorry but I don't know how I should give tips there. But for the chibi to look more natural, you should add detailed clothes. It looks like she doesn't even wear a pants For the sleeves, clothing isn't clipped to the arms, so try to add more volume and folds to it.
- hands can look either like a "glove" or you add small fingers.

Uhm yeah, I guess that's it for now. Since it's your first attempt, this probably sounds harsh but I really don't intend to!! :'>
I remember when I first tried out to draw manga, I copied the Harvest Moon characters from my DS game so that I get to know where the lines and stuff should be and get a feeling for it. It's important!

Hopefully I could help you a bit! You can always contact me for more advice or motivation or whatever.
It's probably a pain in the butt to read this but practicing is really the way to success, mixed with advice and motivation, nothing can go wrong

 

[Royce]

6/10 its pretty cute for a first one, you just need to add more features and shadings c:

 

[toastia]

Ahh I'll support new artists with all my might! :'>
You want it to be rated in numbers? Well. The first attempt is always not the best, so maybe you could try to practice a bit before you wanna get some ratings?
If some tips are allowed, you can read further:
-shape of the head is alright
-eyes need to be more balanced, not one bigger and one smaller, try to draw thin straight lines into the head for orientation. Try also to make them rounder. Make the upper lines of the eye thicker and, maybe, add small lashes for a girly style.
-It looks a bit strange that the right ear is visible but not the left one, the problem is probably caused in context with angle and hair, so for now better try to draw both or leave them out (->long hair)
-Hair..well. I don't know how to give tips, maybe it'll be best if you take a reference and try to "copy" it, so that you get a feeling for it. Uhmm... how to say? Try to draw them more natural, not so stiff and curved.
-Maybe you can place the nose a bit lower.
- try to make the legs more like a slight "triangle" not like 2 straight lines.
- chibi feet are often drawn like "hooves" (sorry, I'm bad at finding the right words DX), basically, they are melted with the leg.
- for the arms and upper torso, I'm sorry but I don't know how I should give tips there. But for the chibi to look more natural, you should add detailed clothes. It looks like she doesn't even wear a pants For the sleeves, clothing isn't clipped to the arms, so try to add more volume and folds to it.
- hands can look either like a "glove" or you add small fingers.

Uhm yeah, I guess that's it for now. Since it's your first attempt, this probably sounds harsh but I really don't intend to!! :'>
I remember when I first tried out to draw manga, I copied the Harvest Moon characters from my DS game so that I get to know where the lines and stuff should be and get a feeling for it. It's important!

Hopefully I could help you a bit! You can always contact me for more advice or motivation or whatever.
It's probably a pain in the butt to read this but practicing is really the way to success, mixed with advice and motivation, nothing can go wrong

tyvm! ^~^ wasn't harsh at all and I'll try to improve

 

[deerui]

i screnshoted your art and kind, oof uh, fixed it


-had to long/round
-hair and body is to stiff,
-hands too round
-eyes are weird
-ears are like an elf's
-too short